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i've never seen you like this
lying open
unfathomable
empty and bare

your eyes the color of smoke
darkening everything you see
almost a signature

joy nor laughter
do i believe all
things go wrong
i'm not feeling happy
the sun is making it tough
to be vengeful

i've not had sex in four months
makes me feel deaf, blind, maybe i have cancer

you're dumb
for making me suffer
Craving.
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ScribbledNotes Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009
the sun is making it tough
to be vengeful


GREAT contrast.

I reached a four month lull at one time. It was very annoying. Relate-able.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2009   Writer
"i've not had sex in four months
makes me feel deaf, blind, maybe i have cancer

you're dumb
for making me suffer"

this is really great!
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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MrPoeticMan Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
Had too send this when I seen it. It suits me well and its so priceless :lick: lol Just trying to cheer you up gorgous
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Send?
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Sandy33311 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
I love every word.

In your comments, "Craving" - same here. (Don't you sometimes wish that you were like women who can live without sex? I'd rather be like me, but sometimes..............................)
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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MrPoeticMan Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
Thats very deep and from the soul girl, I feel your struggle.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:) It's not a struggle, just an annoyance.
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