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our love, a pear i eat
while on my period
bumpy curves
sending creases
burned browned spots
through smooth surfaces
and blood clots
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Ahavati Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Professional General Artist
Excellent.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. It's an old one I revisited and tweaked.
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ohfever Featured By Owner May 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Short, raw, and amazing.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much.
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Amertie Featured By Owner May 3, 2009
something about this has a calming effect on me.
i'm not sure what. or why.

but i really like this.
and i kind of wish it was longer, but it works well short.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea what I should do to further this. It may come to me soon. Thanks for reading it!
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 3, 2009  Professional Writer
As you know by now, I am all about words and images that do not quite mesh and I love jarring the ear. However, i am not sure blood clots works for me here...maybe I just need to reread it a few times. Other than that, I like it a lot.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It probably doesn't sound very good. lol I was thinking blood clots because relationships are like clots in way. It's hard to explain what I was thinking or meaning.
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ScummyVladDrac Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2008
Honestly, i'd would have liked to see more of this.

I know a few have commented this way but it has to be said... it seems like an entire piece is missing & its a shame because such brutial honesty shouldn't be wasted on wondering what else?
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Honestly, I don't know where to take it. I may end up working on it someday though.
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